A time to die. warning: heavy emotional content by SusiQ

Writers • Atmosphere/Mood • posted on Nov 08, 2006

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Your body lying there Tired, broken Unable to move from the lack of energy Only your eyes blink blink blink. I hold your hand Feel it icy Almost dead already. My heart rips into jagged chunks bleed pain I feel so angry yet so sad and frustrated. lumps of tears threaten grow overflow I smile at you a bit of light in this dark time of pain. I stroke your dull lifeless hair trembling tenderly Your will to live stays strong as you die Body shutting down liver kidneys heart I hold your hand Feel it icy Your eyes shut. ********************* I was doing research into one of my characters of my Nanowrimo novel who has cancer. The words and description wouldn't fit into the story until I cleared the blockage with this poem. Sorry to depress everyone but I had to share it. Hugs all!

Comments (12)

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STEVIEUKWONDER

3:56AM | Wed, 08 November 2006

Very moving Sue. I have had my more than my fair share of encounters with the big C, through relatives. Excellent! Steve :o)

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SusiQ

4:01AM | Wed, 08 November 2006

It is a sad world in which we live sometimes. Hugs and thanks Steve.

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PeeWee05

4:02AM | Wed, 08 November 2006

Def powerful words towards cancer. Lovely, emotional writing.

Valerie-Ducom

4:07AM | Wed, 08 November 2006

wowwwww, very impressiv words and very emotional ... Excellent!!! Good day ;)

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meico

4:22AM | Wed, 08 November 2006

Sad indeed, and very moving, and stark in its honesty. I suspect, though, that this is the only way to approach cancer - head on and hard. Very well written. Mike

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Gog

4:47AM | Wed, 08 November 2006

Beautiful poem and very moving, takes me straight back to sitting in hospital watching my Mum pass away from the terrible disease. Very well written.

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DennisReed

2:19PM | Wed, 08 November 2006

Powerful and so true! Indeed parting is such sweet sorrow!

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NothingNess

6:33PM | Wed, 08 November 2006

This was heart wrenching to ready. Well done!

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jo_dis

2:15PM | Fri, 10 November 2006

Very Powerful!

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TallPockets

9:02AM | Sun, 19 November 2006

"It is a sad world in which we live sometimes." -- Yes, Susi!, it sometimes is. WOnderfully, written work! Even one, small comment or encouraging remark given to others may get someone through an otherwise difficult day or time period. T.P.

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SusiQ

6:42AM | Tue, 12 December 2006

Thank you all for your comments. They all keep me going and writing! Hugs to each and every one of you!

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leanndra

10:04AM | Tue, 20 May 2008

Susi, This really hits home for me. I had a friend who died of cancer a couple of years ago. She was 33 and left a husband and two little girls behind. She fought to live, but as we all know, cancer is not a respecter of persons. Most of the time, I can't think of her without crying. She loved life so much. (By the way, I have done NaNoWriMo too.) Lea