A wonderful story capsule... I love the fact that she is thinking of having "fun" in the face of sheer danger. I read the whole thing.. Excellent.

Wonderful writing,, Exceptional++++ Hugsssss Linda :-)

As always Davina exceptional writing, i miss all too much of your talented work hunnie,i will be sure to catch up when i am feeling better Much love and congratualtions again on another wonderful writing T~

Wonderful writing! I wish I had talent like this :o) I can barely come up with a title to my images hehe :o)

Magnificently written and a delight to read! Bravo, and more, More, MORE! :) BTW, was this BOOK ever published, if not, it should be!

Wonderful! absolutely wonderful!

Oh I think this is beautiful, it has a little LOTR flare to it. I think it's the whole ring thing. Clever job putting a riddle in it. Setting the tone for an adventure. That's very well done.

no it has not been published its only about 15 pages long and a work in progress as are all 4 of my books lol but it will be finished on day and hopefully find a home in lots of book shelves ...i am a hopefull if not procrastinating writer .. that some one will go ""damm your good i want to publish your work here is your advance "" on that day i will dance a jig that will rock the world !!!!

Ohh..!!! woww..!! Wonderful writing,.you are amazing my friend.!..so coo.....l love it..!!

nooooo.....you can't just leave it there!!! i'll be wondering where it's going now, for days to come. Please let us have some more... :-))

Nicely done workings and machinations in there,nice of her elders to "Know" but keep the girl totally in the dark,at least the Fairy King was a help..and not out to simply be a pest. The story has much promise I'd think if this bit is an indication it'll be a pleasant read.

wow, what a story, was grpiied to my dseat, and enjoyed every moment! excellent, truely excellent story writting!

I don't spend much time going through the Writer's gallery. You've persuaded me otherwise :o) A little gem.... M x

Excellent work ObsLog!!! I seldom have the patience to read anything, but im glad i did this time :) You are very talented and Im sorry I havent seen that til now. Fantastic!!! Thanks for inviting me ;)

this is very well written hun... we should work together sometime :) MUAH!! ~shay~

Good story 8-) A few typoos &puncuational errors, ut WTF...I still unnerstood it ;-) I wanna read rest!

superb ObsidianLogic.

Thanks for inviting me to read your fantasy tale. Hope you will continue it. As FreeBass said: a number of typing, spelling, and punctuation errors.

i'm no writer, but this good work thus far.. keep up the good work!

Davina as ever your work is remarkable!Thats quite a story so far ,many chapters and ordeals await her,yes I would like to read more!I think evrtyone has there own perceptions to what this world and characters look like,do you illustrate with in books.I normally bore in text veru quickly,I dont when reading from you.Bye calum

An absorbing story superbly told. It held my interest thoroughout and left me wanting more. V

Outstanding work Davina, I didn't know you were so talented! This story does need to be published it's fantastic! I agree with meico, I want more!!!!

You have a definite talent for story telling. My only real critical input would be that you might want to run this through a spell checker first. The pacing of the sentences is uneven and choppy, sometimes it is very effective for conversation and actions, but when setting up the imagery of the scene it helps to make the descriptive flow better. I enjoyed the character and story, reminiscent of early Anne McCaffrey "Pern" or even Ursula K. LeGuin "Earthsea". Keep at it!

hey cool perhaps yopu could help with my manuscript im gonna be doing = ) great story

excellent story writing...now, lets hear the rest. I don't like like stoppin' in the middle of a good tale!

A VERY cool and interesting story you've started here! I sure hope you write more because I'm really wanting to find out how they tame the stallion and all the things that will happen to Mayanna along the way. I hope you'll let me know when the nest installment is posted - VERY well done!

Excellent start:) KEEP it going :)

This is superb writing I was hooked from the start to finish Please let us persuade you to do more Vote n hugs Susan~

Very engaging, imaginative story. Hope you write and share more. :o) CC