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Test of Character

Writers Science Fiction posted on Apr 06, 2021
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The small boy grasped Jack’s hand with surprising strength as they fled through the darkness from the killing machines - everything and everyone he’d ever known were gone. His mother and father had fought the monsters with balls of bright energy that leapt from their hands, but in the end they had each fallen to the overwhelming forces that had come down from the night sky. He had run through the night, trying to escape, trying to understand; he made it as far as the ocean until he could run no more. The monsters gathered around him, and he knew he was going to die, but then a boy several years older had walked calmly from between the death machines and took his hand. “They’re still following us,” shouted Tan. “Stay calm, don’t do anything they’ll see as a threat,” replied Jack, holding the small boy’s hand and leading them across the sand. “What are they, and why are they hesitating to attack?” asked Tan. “Those are Eroden Battle Drones,” explained Jack. “They’re programmed to kill everyone from this planet, but we’re not from this planet, so they’re confused and trying to figure out what to do; it’s a fault in their programming.” Tan tore his eyes from the machine following them and looked at Jack. “The kid isn’t from this planet?” Jack shook his head. “He’s the Gatekeeper’s son. The Gatekeeper should have sent a warning through the gate back to Gate Command when the Erodens invaded, but he wasn’t supposed to fight, I don’t know what he was thinking.” Tan glanced over his shoulder at the alien death machine. “You said the Gatekeepers live their whole lives on the planet with the gate they guard. I understand what he was doing. He was defending all the friends he’s made here; he was defending his home.” “My dad said an army is coming,” the boy’s small voice offered. Jack nodded and let go of the boy’s hand. “Okay, that means the Gatekeeper got the distress call out before he was killed. The Sherata and Aeden army will pour through the gate at any moment now. We have to go.” Tan reached down and took the boy’s other hand. “You can’t leave him here, Jack. If the kind of power I’ve seen out of you is about to happen on the scale of clashing armies, this place is going to turn into molten slag. His father would want us to take him to safety.” Jack frowned. “Weren’t you just complaining about a space alien kidnapping you, and now you want to kidnap someone.” Tan shook his head. “He’s one of your own people, Jack. Prove you’re not the criminal people think you are, save the boy.” Tan scooped the boy up and held him in his arms. “Do the right thing, Jack.” “I am doing the right thing,” protested Jack, his eyes glancing in several directions looking for escape routes. “I got him away from the Battle Drones, didn’t I?” Tan pressed his lips together for a moment. Jack might be an alien from a world so advanced he could harness the power of the sun, but he was still just a boy and needed guidance. “Jack, you let go of his hand when you heard the Aeden army is coming. You don’t want caught by the Sherata and got scared. I know when someone is about to bolt off at a dead run.” Jack took a deep breath and lowered his head. “You’re right, I was about to run. I’m ashamed. We’ll take him with us until I can find someone to leave him with.”

Comments (12)


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eekdog

3:14PM | Tue, 06 April 2021

Excellent all around.

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JoeJarrah

5:16PM | Tue, 06 April 2021

Great story and illustration, always a pleasure to see anew instalment

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jendellas

5:49PM | Tue, 06 April 2021

Right decision Jack. Great story and image.

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RodS

6:33PM | Tue, 06 April 2021

A dramatic moment captured beautifully with both words and art. I love it.

I'm getting Ebots!!! Wheeeee! Just about wet myself when they started coming in! (You didn't need that visual, did you? 😜)

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ontar1

7:29PM | Tue, 06 April 2021

Fantastic scene and story!

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starship64

1:23AM | Wed, 07 April 2021

Fantastic work.

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Radar_rad-dude

1:46AM | Wed, 07 April 2021

Such power plays! Incredible possibilities and stitching together of so many fragmented story lines! I can feel the lines twisting and turning and jumbling and seeking their mates and in the end, it all comes together in a most glorious and incredible crescendo the like not even god could imagine! Oh, and btw, very nice image!

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STEVIEUKWONDER

3:40AM | Wed, 07 April 2021

So much fine content here and the lighting buzzes! Fabulous creation! Well done Sir!

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donnena

11:58AM | Wed, 07 April 2021

Very good!

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bakapo

6:48PM | Wed, 07 April 2021

It's hard to be brave all the time. Good for Tan for speaking up. Nice work!

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rhol_figament

4:36AM | Sat, 10 April 2021

Enjoying the art style for Jack's adventures, keep up the good work!

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anahata.c

12:19AM | Mon, 10 May 2021

Robert, one of my regrets w/ the on-and-off nature of my visits to RR---and then my painfully slow reading speed---is that I have to pick up where I left off, and refresh myself on what happened before; and then never catch up to the present chapters. I regret this because your stories are worthy of a lot more. That said, I'll do my best. I do read ahead as much as I can, and I've got a sense of where this is going. I also read some comments from you about your childhood experience (being taken on a train to where your father was supposed to be)---your storytelling talents are such that I almost thought you were writing another tale, or a chapter, and I was enthralled...except you were speaking of you, your life. It's amazing. I can see how characters like Jack may have connections to where you've been and what you've been through, however great the differences are. Loved what I read.

To this installment, I see that there is often a strong father-son, or older-brother-younger-brother connection in your writing, and it's all here. Jack is kind of a father to the young child, while Tan is bit of a father figure---or big brother figure (better comparison?)---to Jack. There's some antagonism there, but also a lot of care. Sometimes the care is very visible in your tales, sometimes it's unspoken,, sometimes you present it w touches of irony and humor, etc. I like how you vary the tone, even though the connection doesn't change.

I'm not 100% up on the last chapters, but I do remember the monsters, and how these three escaped. And we see in this installment that they're on the run, but they have a moment of repose that allows them to ponder. I like how we learn that the kid must be saved, but also how Jack almost ran away at one point---a point he acknowleldges with shame (poignant moment). And how Tan reminds him (and us) that Jack must be protected/guided too. Some real interplay of fatherly/big-brotherly concern across the board. Oh---the visual is another fine piece of chiaroscuro fr you, with real, thick blacks, highlighted by the key details of all three people. And Jack and the young boy are staring out of frame, taking us far beyond the present...I know you're cutting back on these images (I can fully understand), but they've been marvelous.


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