I know what you mean. I haven't been writing lately (except for my comics, where I get to use Poser!), but long swaths of convo are annoying. Within the convo, I try to have the characters perform an action that might indicate their feelings, without using silly verbs or decorative modifiers. For example, (just pulling this out of my butt): She tapped her pen on the desk as he spoke. You don't have to say how she tapped it or why. The action indicates impatience. Okay, at least, I've TRIED to do that when I was writing.

Anyway, I still like your version more. Grok's sounds like a teenager wrote it. Of course, if you're writing for a teen audience, then….

I only really started writing after retirement and only for my own entertainment. I don't try to sell my books. I just throw them up on Amazon. Maybe I should take them down and throw them up on Wattpad. I did that recently for a silly short story I wrote a while back. For the past few years, every time I get the urge to write a novel/novella, I end up doing some other comic instead. Oh, well. Keeping the brain happy before the dementia hits.

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