Looking good. I'd pan left, putting her in the center and the man close to the right side of the image. Zoom in and down. There is too much head room above thier heads. Maybe angle up more, with a POV from knee level looking up. This makes the characters larger than life. Looking down would create the opposite effect. I'd stick her smack dab in the middle with maybe a spot light on her face so the majority of the light is on her. Now, you wrote that she is not the main character... do you want to center on a minor character or the antagonist?

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