Chuck, I hope I didn't come off as a know-it-all. Just wanted to "catch" that before you go too far. Usually I am the one getting caught tweaking the English language. I wanted to also say more about what I liked in the story. The idea that these robots are being "upgraded" and using distance - as in the case of the oldest looking bot, it shows how they could possibly have emotions - fear, saddness, etc. Good work. The music lends to the mood as well. Did you do the computer screens in AfterEffects?

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