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"Alright, Grigham. Scouting. For what- and for whom?"
"A safe place for my family." She arched a brow and he shrugged. "Greeners kill deserters... and their families."
"Then why did you leave?"
An odd look crossed his face. "Your Grace, it may be difficult. But think back to the fight and all may be clear."
Unbidden images flashed as the room spun about her: The clearing... a raider aiming his crossbow... the powerful bolt tearing into her upper thigh, slamming her to the ground... recharging another bolt, aiming again... a sword erupting from his chest in a spray of gore... and a Greener... this... this... Grigham... eyes locked with hers, backing into the woods with a crimson blade.
She sat heavily. "You were there. You... saved me." Silence fell as tension evaporated. "W-Why?"
He took a deep breath. "You were with child. All I could see was my own pregnant wife in your place. I thought of her, my two precious little girls. I could no longer bear what they do to women." His eyes held hers. "You are queen - do with me as you will. But I beg of you: Protect my family."
TO BE CONTINUED!
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EDIT: If you read the comments below you see a mix of desire for a slightly different image. I satisfied that with the next image, but then people were distraught about messed up story continuity. So accordingly, I broke the original chapter into two new chapters that match the images. Voila - everybody got the image they wanted and now the story has proper coninuity again.
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Oct 22, 2011 9:05:32 amby brewgirlca Online Now! Homepage »
This is exceptionally well done on several counts. Firstly of course the perfect perspective that encompasses her point of view, the hand naturally reaching to her wounded leg, the realistic blood.
The story itself flows smooth and ends with twist as Aranee asserts herself in a way that is not at all expected.
Oct 23, 2011 11:08:08 pmby myrrhluz Homepage »
I am sorry you are having so much trouble with the scene, but this is an excellent fall back plan. I like the perspective and the feeling of knowing what will happen next with the two men in the trees. Your writing is very descriptive and I could see in my mind the scene in the indoor setting. I like the change in Aranée. It seems she has found something to bring her out of her depression. The fugitives will be a very interesting addition to the story. While there is always the danger of spies among them, their loyalty as a group will be very likely to become quickly and fervently Aranée's. They will help police themselves from any of their number who would do her harm. I look forward to the further developments with great anticipation. Excellent narrative and image!